Riku
Kid
I chose my path. I'll follow it.
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Post by Riku on Jul 16, 2004 3:11:11 GMT -5
It was peaceful, the birds were singing and the sun was bright. Renk, an 8 year-old boy who had never experienced such a beautiful day, had decided to tan in the sun. His mother was baking and his father was napping on the rocking-chair.
But that was all going to change, Renk sensed it, he felt it, but he couldn't explain it. Clouds started to form and darkness soon fell apon the village. Renk looked in fear as body-less shadows started to creep up towards him. In no time he immediately ran to his house, where he'd be safe. That's what he thought. His house was ripped to shreds, and heartless had appeared around him. Renk screamed, and all the sudden he felt a strange energy pulse out of him. His eyes began to brighten and glow, te heartless semmed to vanish, one by one they left, as if they were afraid, of him? Did he do this? He glanced the other heartless that were causing havoc apon the village. They, too, seemed to be afraid and had disappeared. What was this new power that he discovered? He turned around to see that his parents were lying movementless on the ground. His eyes swelled up with tears...he wanted revenge. He wanted revenge. He was going to get revenge.
So how do you think of my fanfic? Was it any good? Should I make more? Tell me!
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Post by Derek Starns on Aug 19, 2004 18:59:17 GMT -5
it's good I like it
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Oninx
Kid
With darkness, comes great sacrifice.
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Post by Oninx on Oct 17, 2004 12:24:02 GMT -5
Pretty good, and beleive me, I know good fanfics. Most times, fics are much longer. Keep at it.
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Post by Sanjii on Jan 10, 2005 1:07:13 GMT -5
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Post by sora134 on Jan 18, 2005 11:18:05 GMT -5
That was good
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Post by sora134 on Jan 26, 2005 11:23:55 GMT -5
I liked it was good ;D ;D
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